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Don-Barzini

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posted Friday, December 08, 2017 8:04:14 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Don-Barzini
Check this out, give me some feed back

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Post COital CIgarette

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posted Friday, December 08, 2017 9:12:42 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Post COital CIgarette
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88

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posted Friday, December 08, 2017 11:16:01 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for 88
Feeling the intro. The percussion, the vocal sample, all that.

The air sounds in the background is a nice touch, but it's a little too noticeable when it drops out a couple bars before the end. Like when the furnace turns off and you hadn't noticed it, but notice its absence now that it's stopped. I think keep the air thing, but let it stay for the whole song, to the very end, rather than let it drop out a few bars before. Because it's nice and subtle and having it drop out at the end draws too much attention to it, which kind of defeats what's so nice about it -- its subtly. Imo.

If you want to have something drop out a few bars early, let it be the percussion instead.

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posted Saturday, December 09, 2017 12:17:28 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for Post COital CIgarette
id say maybe just raise the bpm once the intro finishes

don ive heard your shit before and i have been impressed. you deleted your past stuff, but it was pretty damn good, if its yours, keep at it

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Don-Barzini

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posted Saturday, December 09, 2017 12:18:30 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for Don-Barzini
Thanks guys, appreciate the feed back

The voice sample is Skeme from the movie Style Wars, you have probably heard him sampled on the mos def common talib kweli song "respiration" where he talks about crime in the city for the intro

Other than the sample I used for the beat, the other sample is from a subway video on youtube

88, I feel you on the ending with it not matching up

Graffiti was a big part of my childhood/early adulthood, felt like this beat kinda captured it. Peace

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Don-Barzini

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posted Saturday, December 09, 2017 12:37:24 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for Don-Barzini


Not in the video version

When Skeme says Dez he is talking about the legendary DJ Kay Slay

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Don-Barzini

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posted Saturday, December 09, 2017 2:31:22 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for Don-Barzini
NWS, can I get a grade?

Sorry to triple post

If I dropped a beat tape, would you prefer it to be sampled up like this, or beats that are more busy? Or both?

Appreciate any feed back, pos or neg

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Nassau William Senior

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posted Saturday, December 09, 2017 2:46:29 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for Nassau William Senior
B+

Close to a banger...most of the comments itt are on point.

I kept hoping for either a beat switch...or raise the BPM after the intro (as mentioned).

But you had me with the Style Warsí sample. I was admiring some graffiti today on a bank building. Was a big part of my life too.

I like busy beats with samples. Thes One, Lifestyle Marketing, is a good example.

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Nassau William Senior

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posted Saturday, December 09, 2017 2:54:31 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for Nassau William Senior
Also, Iíve been listening to The Audible Doctor - Soul Slaps Vol. 1&2. Another great example of busy beats with dope samples.

I think the albums are free on bandcamp if you havenít heard them.

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Seme__one

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posted Saturday, December 09, 2017 3:12:09 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for Seme__one
needs some work, co-sign a beat switch up or something, after the sample ends its a bit bare and repetitive on repeated listenings, dope sample that's a favorite part of the film for me the look on his moms face and her comments are classic...

its good tho'

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88

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posted Saturday, December 09, 2017 3:59:31 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for 88
I was going to mention need for a beat switch up too - a bridge or something - but then I didn't, because I'm not sure what the end result is expected to be. I mean, if it's an instrumental, then, yeah, add a switch up because it gets repetitive. However, if the intention is for someone to rap over it, then maybe it's fine. Depends on what a rapper would do with it. If you go listen to beats made specifically for rappers, they're typically far more repetitive than beats made to be instrumentals, because the vocal is the main instrument on a rap track.

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Seme__one

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posted Saturday, December 09, 2017 4:06:41 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for Seme__one
^ I assumed it was for an instro track from the cover

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LhiteWines

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posted Saturday, December 09, 2017 6:54:44 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for LhiteWines
I think the drums are a tiny bit too shiny. Roll a little bit of highs off them. Maybe drop out the snare or kick once or twice for variation and have the hihat at different velocities so it isn't 'tic tic tic tic' the whole time.

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Don-Barzini

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posted Saturday, December 09, 2017 12:18:22 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Don-Barzini
Gonna try to work on this today and see what I can do

Here goes the original sample, you can kinda see why I'm stuck without a switch up. After the first 12 seconds it switches and the rest of the song doesnt work with the part I chose

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88

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posted Saturday, December 09, 2017 1:24:09 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for 88
Is there anything you could do with the "eye-yiiii-yi-yiiiiiiii" part from 0:42-0:47? Not sure if the instrumental behind that vocal would line up with your beat or not. That vocal might sound cool slowed down, like how you've slowed the rest if the beat down. I don't know. Maybe as a beat switch up, or maybe even just as something that happens at the end of your beat. That part could kick in, and then you fade it out. That beat switch might be too jarring. I can't tell.

CS the drums comment. Too clean.

Shawn Lee has a bunch of drum breaks on his bandcamp, specifically for people to sample. Maybe see if any of those would match your sample?

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Paper Piff And Polo

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posted Saturday, December 09, 2017 1:29:31 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Paper Piff And Polo
Lol

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Don-Barzini

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posted Sunday, December 10, 2017 1:10:42 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for Don-Barzini
I never use drum breaks, always program my drums

Definitely need to start getting drum kits people put out, Jake One has some dope shit under the name Snare Jordan

Check this beat out, has more switches and my godfather tag on it with the Nas sample as well

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LhiteWines

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posted Sunday, December 10, 2017 5:03:09 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for LhiteWines
You can still program a drum break. Just slice it into small pieces. That's all Jake One does.

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posted Sunday, December 10, 2017 8:45:14 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for dR.prOf   Click Here to Email dR.prOf
Both beats posted are fucking dope. I love that smoothe shit

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Don-Barzini

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posted Sunday, December 10, 2017 12:57:10 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Don-Barzini
I know how to chop breaks and make one shots

Thought he was saying to loop breaks

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LhiteWines

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posted Sunday, December 10, 2017 2:31:04 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for LhiteWines
Barzini, Send me the stems and i guarantee i can mix it way better for you.

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Don-Barzini

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posted Sunday, December 10, 2017 2:37:48 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Don-Barzini
Whats your email?

I'll sent it to you later today after the Vikings game

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Don-Barzini

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posted Sunday, December 10, 2017 2:42:02 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Don-Barzini
Listen to that second beat, I guarantee you can't mix it better than that

Shit is polished

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posted Sunday, December 10, 2017 4:59:27 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Sp 90s
Fly sample. Very dope

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posted Sunday, December 10, 2017 7:39:31 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Selah
Mixing is pretty subjective and a lot depends on what your going for so...

If I were to make some suggestions I would say both of the joints you posted are lacking in sub bass. Normally there is a goal to fill up the full frequency range to give the mix a greater sense of depth.

Also volume automation curves at some points would help provide a humanizing element like someone else was saying about varied velocity on Hi hat hits. Like right after the Skeme sample upping the volume just a few dB and then back down after like the cymbal crash or around their helps mark that as a transition and then maybe even like the last two bass guitar notes as kind of an emphasis on the final.

Iíd also fade the beats with an exponential curve so they donít stop so abruptly yet at the same time donít fade out over an extended period of time.

They both are definitely dope. You got a good ear for sounds.

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posted Monday, December 11, 2017 7:40:25 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Litney Spears
This is good but it's too slow to rap too

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posted Monday, December 11, 2017 7:42:36 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for are u ready
don u saw the vikes got robbed yesturdday?

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