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Song Written To My Ex... Feedback Appreciated
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joshnwmn

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Member Since: 2017
posted Tuesday, September 19, 2017 12:48:10 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for joshnwmn   Click Here to Email joshnwmn
Hey it's been year since I even fucking talked to you
Life keeps moving through and through and now I'm over you
But I can't lie, I can still feel the bruises
Time passes wounds heal but I felt like a nuisance
Sorry if i smothered you
I was just afraid of losing you
I said I would always care for you
Those weren't empty words
That were Hurled pre emptively
And my speech wasn't slurred so I know you fucking heard it from me
Treat me like the enemy I envied you
To tell the truth you were right
Times passed I had sadness but now I'm back at it fucking fantastic but the question that I'm left asking
Is how you fucking brushed me off and left my ass in the past tense?
I don't hold grudges
I eventually said fuck it
I hope you're doing well and I hope you go to college
and I hope you chase your dreams
you're a great fucking artist
just know I hope your happy and I'm sorry that it ended badly

Saw you out in public just a couple months back
Saw your dad
I was buzzed so I walked right past
then I thought about the past
How I called every day and then in the blink of an eye how it all went away
Look I'm not complaining
just explaining
See I take the pain and paint it with this picture I created
this is not for recreation
It's a place for my emotion
When I'm going through the motions and I feel like I'm slowing
damn
I know that you're gonna hate this
Space it out and not replay this
That's ok cuz I don't need no validation
I just wish you the very best
Needed to get this off my chest
And put it all to rest
The past will never go away
It lingers in the shade
And will briefly show its face
And when I remember life's a race
I put that friend behind me so I don't lose my place
Just know I hope you're happy
And I'm sorry that it ended badly
Peace out

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mcfuck

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posted Tuesday, September 19, 2017 1:02:48 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for mcfuck
first bar " im over you"

should have been last bar.

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joshnwmn

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Member Since: 2017
posted Tuesday, September 19, 2017 1:21:05 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for joshnwmn   Click Here to Email joshnwmn
at mcfuck: Thanks for the feedback! That actually makes sense and would give the last line a bit more of a punch. Thanks.

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Maymon Fresh

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posted Friday, September 29, 2017 12:10:11 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for Maymon Fresh   Click Here to Email Maymon Fresh
That were Hurled pre emptively you should ryhme that sooner you did but late..she must have meant alot to you the passion is genuine.

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