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TECH NOIR

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posted Wednesday, January 10, 2018 12:13:54 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for TECH NOIR
still alive,
surprised?

when will i die
or
when will
wind still
or
when will
wind mill
sit still

topic
quite quixotic
quick coffin
for giant thoughts.
quit smoking
quit coughing
for time that's lost.
escape the
iron box
like the
timeless trick
the final twist
is the bigger puzzle
that i am in.

still alive,
surprised?

still surprised,
alive?

reckon records'
effervescent.
energy ever-present
ever essenced.
mind and rhyme
are separate weapons
separate sections
that coalesce in freshness
(don't second guess it)

I'm still alive...
but you couldnt tell
crucified
with crooked nails
the wooden stave
a standing grave,
the newest hell.
the fight is truly still
tooth and nail.
Flesh and bone.
Bone and blood.
Thorns and mud.

but..
there's more to come
when truth's unveiled
for who's still here

Im still...

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TECH NOIR

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posted Wednesday, January 10, 2018 9:24:28 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for TECH NOIR
Im still alive.
Vilified
by the illest lie.
sincerely convinced that i
must have really died.
..and i nearly did
and metaphorically
it really is
some sort of
spirit switch,
soul swap.
Stone heart
swapped with a
heart of Flesh.
Far from Death.
Renewed.
Re-Sown, Re-Hewn
and Garden Fresh.
'Pardon Him He Must
Have Found Religion'
Well, no
found the Vision
that satiated my
malnutrition.
Sound conviction,
like the loudest sentence.
Period.
No longer paragraph
without a premise.
So..
now the difference
is direction.
Instead of
sitting at the intersection
instead of wrong-way
cross-way
misdirection.
Instead of insurrection.
Instead of insufficient.
Instead of Independence.
I hitch my wagon to the Origin Trail.
Outside the ordinar
Thank Yah
Im alive and well.

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Marty

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posted Thursday, January 11, 2018 5:32:33 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Marty
That was depressing
I hope you will think more optimistic
Peace

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mcfuck

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posted Thursday, January 11, 2018 9:07:53 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for mcfuck
love

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tech noir

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posted Friday, January 12, 2018 9:42:58 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for tech noir
hey thanks bro.

it was not meant to be depressing, really it was a gut expression of continued vitality, which is normal!

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Marty

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posted Friday, January 12, 2018 2:41:33 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Marty
I understand that you were expressing yourself. But I know from my own experience in life that thinking negative is bad for the spirit.
I was once very pessimistic, and at that time I was unproductive. But now that I think more positive, I am a lot happier and I am accomplishing more.

I know that there were some positive aspects in your verse, but it was generally negative.
I think you should find something that you are interested in. The world is a very fascinating place when you think about it!
Take care TECH
And keep busy in a positive way

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TECH NOIR

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posted Friday, January 12, 2018 7:18:13 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for TECH NOIR
so marty, this wasnt a suicide note or anything like that. How can a verse entitled 'im still alive' be negative? From how I believe being alive is a good thing. In fact i do not believe this was polarized at all, i think it was neutral. But the classic im still alive should not, in the least bit, invoke negative associations

maybe you are drawing from your own experiences and misinterpreting the sentiment, which is also perfectly fine!

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Marty

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posted Friday, January 12, 2018 8:07:39 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Marty
I thought that the line "When will I die?" was negative
But I may have misunderstood it
I'm glad that you are not depressed or suicidal
just a misunderstanding on my part
Take care

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tech noir

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posted Friday, January 12, 2018 8:55:38 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for tech noir
good lookin out! but yes, not suicidal or depressed. Things are looking good right now.

I was only ever suicidal once and it was facetiously in handcuffs in a waiting area and i got what i deserved for playing with cops.

Just curious, how is 'when will i die' depressing?

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Marty

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posted Saturday, January 13, 2018 9:13:56 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for Marty
I like living
and I want to live as long as possible
most people do not want to die
Do you think death is a positive thing?

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tech noir

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posted Saturday, January 13, 2018 11:36:18 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for tech noir
I never said I wanted to die, but to answer your question death does not necessarily have to be a bad thing.

For most death is the unknown, which is scary. Not for me though!

You must have read into the piece that I wanted to die because I never said that.

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Marty

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posted Sunday, January 14, 2018 9:21:36 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for Marty
I guess I misunderstood what you were saying
Take care
Peace

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tech noir

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posted Sunday, January 14, 2018 4:29:39 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for tech noir
i should have wrote, 'im still alive!' with an exclamation point. maybe then people wouldnt be so confused . thanks for the crit!

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Marty

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posted Sunday, January 14, 2018 5:43:50 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Marty
Well if you are important you should have Wrote I in a capital not i in lowercase!
LOL

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tech noir

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posted Sunday, January 14, 2018 6:39:00 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for tech noir
what do you mean by that...?

rap is by definition a self promotion. is that a bad thing? anyway

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Marty

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posted Sunday, January 14, 2018 9:04:16 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Marty
I was saying that you used a lower case i instead of a capital I
the word "I" is always supposed to be capitalized to show its importance that's all
I wasn't trying to offend you or anything

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tech noir

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posted Sunday, January 14, 2018 10:25:08 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for tech noir
i use lowercase 'i' occasionally as a statement about how i view others as equals to me, aside what culture teaches. the 'move' is purposeful, though i dont do it all the time.

i appreciate you noticing, it is significant!

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Marty

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posted Monday, January 15, 2018 9:11:00 AM    Click Here to See the Profile for Marty
Cool

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Maymon Fresh

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posted Tuesday, January 16, 2018 11:13:38 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for Maymon Fresh   Click Here to Email Maymon Fresh
Its like you are finding the strength to struggle

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TECH NOIR

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posted Thursday, January 18, 2018 7:21:00 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for TECH NOIR
good look brother!!!

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agent7D6

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posted Monday, January 22, 2018 10:20:37 PM    Click Here to See the Profile for agent7D6
Dope write. Marty stfu

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