Your crew out numbers mine 50 tah 2/ but me and my nigga came threw and murdered every one of you/ spittin on undergrund hip hop take your whole crew out like connect the dots/ aready got the glock cocked/ your time is runnin out tic toc/ got this game on lock/ my rhymes aint never gonna stop cuz i go the power to flow for hours spits so crazy knocked down the twin towers/ did i hurt your feeligs well buy yourself a flower/ you bitch ass coward/...im the realist to be/ the illest tah see/ killahs cant see me/ ballers cant d me/ i blaze for days/ off purple haiz/ but it dont efect the way i play/ my skillz is shinin/ my rhyming/ did the same damage as the 9 did/ cuz time afta time/ my rhymes never die/ nigga like me gotta stay high/ cuz god knows tomarrow/ i will feel sorrow/ cuz one of my soldiers will hit the dirt/ known that nigga since my birth/ as long as i bean on planet earth/ i feel the hurt/ but cant shed no tears/ cuz as i near my enemy's i show no fear/ us 7/ them 11 /walk close and pull the 4 5th/ i hit 1 bitch/ hope that nigga dont snitch
i fucked upa little didnt get a chance to finsih..my moms was bitchin so i had to hurry..i dont think it bad though what do you think..
Unoriginal but well-phrased, some promise in your lines. Hows someone gonna snitch after you shoot them? You must not be a very good shot. Obviously youre not a thug, see "my mom says" thing. Try to write something original and sincere. Youre a bit better than these other guys are givin you credit for. Lines are better individually than how youre linking them, you need to work on linking them better. Your crew is pretty small eh? 2 people aint much haha. Stuff like "my skillz is shinin/ my rhyming" should be edited out in a hurry. Really bad. That doesnt count as two lines man. " cuz god knows tomarrow/ i will feel sorrow" is real bad too. Still, overall, phrased pretty well. Persistence prevails.
"i fucked upa little didnt get a chance to finsih..my moms was bitchin so i had to hurry..i dont think it bad though what do you think.."
^this was almost as wack as what you wrote above that