What!? S.prose And Aegis!? Spice Up A Slow Day, "city Blues" Peep....
I finished this joint a while ago, but it's been marinating for a minute... work continues on the EP, got a graphic artist working on the cover as we speak, and producers are being contacted. Hopefully we'll be hitting the studio for anoter bang session next sat. or fri..... keep your eyes out.
Anyways... enjoy this shit...
beatsmith aegis and sherlock prose...
Sun rise, chimneys tell stories of humble sidewalks/
Twisting there concrete twin the city brushed with chalk/
Industrial side street, churning out miles of tall fumes/
Dwelling under rooftops, if these walls could talk they’d tell volumes/
There was Cindy, who found her nightlife with one minute men/
Her hay day was d day men played with destiny again/
VD, STD, just letters she's too familiar with/
Her sex life let death through like a siv/"
A sucker for condom rolls and old men with stale smiles/
She reserved another tombstone with this promiscuous lifestyle
Turn to Jessie, a graffiti king, all city wall haunted/
Number one on the vandal list, she was most wanted/
She tried to tell mom, life revolved around krylon/
Family untied as time went on…/
Her parents didn’t get the gist, piecing was her passion
Making the streets beautiful with ghetto fashion
Living the colors, olive green and bright reds
Her father wanted her to become a model instead
She’d rather be dead, so she climbed the tallest tower
Painted her feeling with blood as zero hour
Then Mike, found life in the words he spat on stage/
Used to be happy, now his pen bleeds when it touches the page/
Papyrus canvas, he painted the sunrise on lines of college rule/
Until he donated to much into his thought collection pool/
Underground life was never clean, dirty mind repped vanity/
Hole in his pocket, forgot to pick up his sanity/
Scum underbelly, there was no clean slate rape/
Maggots to mind, mike hung himself from innards of his DAT tape/
A Catholic girl, her days took the shape of bibles and confessionals/
She spread her hands for her father, a soul professional/
She question the profession she’d chose, didn’t think she was one of those/
Clean from soul to sight, as near death grasped the dismissal of “so?”s/
So she denied, rosary dreams dashed as Hail Mary’s failed to bring cash/
Left the mission in anti steeple position, was this supreme being fiction?/
Spoke to mother, and left in flustered conniption/
Hope hoped a train, mesmerized by the pistons/
drop your comments, advice, praise or w/e you feel applicable...
peace and love
Yo. i understand what your saying, but, this song was madd rushed, just wanted to make sure you cats still knew i was alive...
And YES solja, an EP is on the way, featuring some biig production heads (see hopefully molemen, DJ kno of cunninlynguists, etc.)
Also, this wasen't written to this beat.
Hence the reason it's off. Lots of excuses, but you'll see monday, when we come back with ttwo songs... what's REALLY up.
And to all those who have ehard what we can do...
HANDFUL OF DUST EP...... DUE MID CHRISTMAS/LATE WINTER
Herez the most accurate feedback you will get on this board..(with a few exceptionz)
I'm guess'n your young. If thatz the case my critique would be something like....i can't really analyze this cuz it was jus weak period. My advice would be 2 hang around the Mc Board for about a year and listen to the old headz on the mic. fuck jus listen to anybody who actually sounds good i dont know what to tell you...If your over 18 yrs old give up....for real i don't mean 2 disrespect you or hurt your pride but man atleast get a beat with some fuckin KICK 2 it...the voice and the delivery is what is killing you....dont feel bad thO...your not the only kid i heard on some REALLY need improvement type shit...Back in Tha day My delivery wuz yach period...i had no status..i think we all benn there but you need TIME...EP??? dont even play yourself dawg...keep studying the art before you try selling your picturez.....One positive thing I can say is you'd be an ill Poet...your lyricz arent bad...and before you blow up and wanna kill me for my feedback...remember...I'm nobody...take it for what itz worth..peace
this reminds me of "between the lines" by atmosphere
well the topic at least
Liked this prose...unusual flow is good keep it.
When ya voice breaks proper...you gonna be nasty.
Sherlock.. I say it once and i say it again. You are fuking dope. lol.
I liked the beat. Flow could use a lil work though. Imagery was incredible.
Your thoughts formed some psyche contact between Shakespear and Da Vinchi.
Illustrative, intellectual, Gully like whoah.
Keep the knowledge and keep the wisdom.
the voice will change in time..
you young talented fuck
i was beginin to wonder what happend to you..
im sure the homework and parents got you locked down tho..
i seem to recall usin this beat not too long ago..
aegis is the man,
delivery and flow were nice... good emotion
l i n u s
damn !!!!!!! every ones using this beat ..
doesnt seem like this was written to the beat though
quality was horrible..
i was really diggin the chorus, my complaint is the voice is waaaaay to loud over the beat.
u got pretty good delivery. Just work on the mixing a bit, an be one with the beat.
Have to agree with Shatter on the words gettin squeezed in...I got the feeling this wasn't written to the Aegis beat. There was a couple points where the syllables were crammed in thereby forcing the flow somewhat.
Good emotion and totally dug the content.
Didn't get to the website ish last weekend but I'mna give 'er at least a couple hours on Saturday, actually hae some free time.
what up indeed, keep postin S.lock
young right?... I like some of the lyrics... gotta' touch your flow up though..
If you were performing in front of a crowd...it's not mastered enough for someone else to even catch it and double your voice.
Not only that, but if you spit the same verse a week later, you wouldn't say it extactly how you said it the first time because you DON'T have a distinct flow.
You squeeze words in and everything and sometimes take too long to rhyme.
I liked the beat... I was loving the energy, you went straight at it.
lol@the huge breath right before the last chorus, sounded like you were about to swim across a lake underwater...
anyways, you musta re-recorded this today, because i heard it different yesterday,
but this was nice, good lyrics, i still cant get used to your flow, you go all over the place but somehow it has some rhythm to it, well whatever works
keep progressing soon youll get me inna battle...hahha
switchin it up...
different from your normal steez
shit was hot regardless
"the kids arent alright" remix
dropped some more good lyrics on this one, stayin consistent
beat started kinda wack but dropped ill after the intro
lot of energy on the chorus, ill delivery overall
could use that studio quality tho