A Passage From The Gospel According To Smokey
His Momentum was building blocks to manifestation
He’s Conscience telling put this rage to extermination
The light was his final destination,
Without hesitation he put yall in isolation
Writings from the gospel according to Smokey
Caused a killin spree to infest the youth like loki
he fed 5000 with ammunition and recognition
With demolition, pain he explained the definition
It was a new tradition, he parted the lines and the rhymes,
He smited the whack, split bars and them to dimes,
he tortured the malicious in hell’s fire eternally,
he prized the angelic in heaven’s paradise, externally,
Before your demise you’ll see from his eyes,
Before your baptize you’ll see all the lies,
All the cries of souls sayin goodbyes,
he devised in disguise, advise then revised,
he Overcame emotion and wiped out, expressions,
Seized demotion and wiped out depressions,
Sacrificed possessions to regain, tranquillity,
Ceased all means of sanity to regain security,
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check it smokey, lyrics played out a lil bit... but dont worry - this was still an ill piece in my eyes. i like this shit. stay up bruh
yea smokes i agree with deadly... however its still good... but i ve read som better stuff from you... hey smokey check out this new lyric i put up 2day... i think u ll b feelin it hard... coz its deep. its called 'girl found in the woods'
i think you should throw some multies in this,
cuz ya rhyme scheme is to simple
like, extermination, destination, isolation
-ation rhymes but its majorly played out
somethin like..'words r blazin'..blah blah..'extermination'
see words rhymes with 'term', then theres a syllable that doesn't rhyme, then blazin an ation connect to rhyme, which makes it sound tight.
an if ya gonna put rhymes an dimes, throw some other words in front of them that connect, to add more flow to ya scheme..
cuz what i'm seeing right here is a very very basic rhymes scheme,
the content wasn't that bad in it though ..
keep at it.
Damn i see your gettin better
keep it up man