I want everyone to criticize this! A MUST READ
I'm an infant emcee/reachin' for a distant key/to unlock my potential with the fury of a torential down pour/deliver punchlines that pound more/and completely surround your/
inner most mental structure/rupture the cranial membrane/you black out/once you come through you won't feel the same/you stack doubt/who's to blame?/whats the track about?/Recognize my name/I get slept on/in the mean time you gettin' crept on/while your attention wonders/my mind ponders/way after way to display my fantastic ray of insight/I never bite/simply cause my own shit is mad tight/I write/then watch lyrics take flight/to before unattainable height/styles extend to the outer atmosphere/its substantially clear I'm here/and I will steer/myself in the right direction/never catchin' the infection of wackness/you know its true cause I back this/like gold does paper currency/I warn with urgency/to avoid my path/for I will disperse my wrath as needed utilizing a math equation/I'm dazin', glazin' with flammable ointment, then blazin' to disappointment/any kid who wants to make a bid/I'll flip their lid/exposing the fake-emcee inferior interior/I'm superior/to see it is plain and simple/like a dimple I've left a permanent impression/and now i'm done addressin'/this board/
Maybe it's AffEX that can't flow cuz I had no problem, what-so-ever.
This was... and still is... dope.
(Nice drop. Very, very nice drop.)
UNi~VERsATiLE MoVEmEnT '99
L o R d ~ F l a t l i n e r
Affex, I started playin some instrumentals and I could flow to everyone I played, you just gotta be on beat with whatever you are listening to
YO I LIKE DA WORD PLAY AND STRUCTURE. THAT'S RIGHT SON,MAKE DA RHYME FIT YOUR WORD PLAY.CRITICISIM REALLY DOESN'T DECIDE ANYTHING ABOUT YOURSELF.EVERYTHING STARTS WITH SELF,BUT DA RHYME WAS DOPE!
you had some nice wordplay there man, no doubt..but I got this disease, and it's been buggin me lately..I read peoples' posts and listen to instrumentals at the same time...just to see if they flow..after all, that's what a MC HAS to be able to do though, flow...just didn't find the beat to read this to...but I'll keep lookin'.(maybe I oughta stop doing that, reading and listening..LOL)
Other than that, lyrics were nice..
--trust me...you ain't ready---