I'm after the soul and after that the passion....
I gripped the mic with both hands/gazed into a haze of smoke/stepped back from the mic stand and spoke/flowing, knowing only a few would understand/still I stuck with the plan/spilled verse after verse revealing who I am/Hungry, Im feeding off passion/wishing this moment would last as I'm caught up in the rapture/trying to capture the essence of what I'm after/in fact it ain't the platinum or the gold/not easily sold on what you own/turn cold if money and jewlels is all I'm shown/blown away by my mind spray/spoken word, unspoken heard/knowledge of self is my guide on this Bizarre Ride through life/no need to hide the fact that so few of us see eye to eye/that's why I'm continuously passing 'em by like the Pharcyde/stopping only when I feel that vibe/heart beats and cold feet/feeling you on levels so deep our souls speak/the weak lack confidence, energy and passion/trapped in a closed mind like a caption/actions speak louder than words as backpackers tote empty sacks and vocally attack what they feel is wack/talk is cheap when haters speak/you ain't elite unless you part of the eight teams balling on their way to the Final Four/better save that speech/or do you want more??/A unique female with stories to tell/open your mind, step outside the lines/realize in time my esoteric vibes will make your headswell
nice work luv, i felt this post. keep reppin on the board. peace
hardgore elite thug niggaz
I must say this was hott...
Felt the energy...No Doubt...Imagery...
Thisis a nice post...
Madd Talent, No Doubt...
~Second City Sunz~
I didn't realize that before, Miss_FunkyChick, but it was in the back of my mind...
Thanks for the replys, feedback is always good. I definitely need to work on it, stretch it out, develop it, expand it, but I'm glad you were diggin it. By the way, it's meant to be a spoken word piece moreso than a rhyme, so if you read it from that perspective, the sentences might not seem so long...just a thought.
that was dope as fuck kid...real nice shit!!
For real this was probably the best set of bars I've read all week, some of the lines are long but they seem to flow close to seamless, tight rhymes too
Rhyme was cool.
(yEah... I suppose shorty's worth another look.)
"Fuck liberty. Give me death..."
- F l a t l i n e r -
Yea!!, I like the lyrics, nice clear and precise.