Repost: A Lost Soul
Scientific Research still cant conclude how my birth occured-
From a infant to a grown man... In just a sound of a word-
Astounded but disturbed-
Until the Demon in me finally cried out and amerged- And Stood
Time stopped from the goreous cry-
I stepped back-
And in an instants i suddenly folded all time-
Doctors began to hide as me and all the walls flickered and shined-
Fusing wit all the elements around me..
As well as non- elemental and demise-
Thoughts and images running through mind..
like channel surfing projecting it from me through my eyes-
Under my feet... everything under me began to die-And left no color of it but grey-
It continued to consume life by 1000 cubic square feet... like it was some type of plague-
Doctors. patients were no more as they all ran away-
Not even takin their last breath-
Grasped from an astral blackhole from the demi across my chest-
Death was a toll incased with the bullets of doom-
Ending everything once living till it stopped...
Leaving it either dead or consumed-
Slaying life as quick as light turned on lighting up the whole room-
Leaving deep gashes on earth....
Like a river that water used to run through-
While consuming life i took in abundant amount of wisdom-
I began to understand that life was the earths "true" serum-
In the blink of an eye i was removed from the earth-
To another planet where this "Being" said "we switched your soul with a different birth-
Your new agenda.. is to cause death ... thats your common goal-
I understood what he meant.....
So i drift into time eternally taking life-
.... As a lost soul-
my verse was simple and short, but it was freestyle at tha purest.
anyways, im not here ta criticize ya but ta give some advice.
i like ya shit its pretty poetic...but perhaps a lil too "unreal". it seemz like most headz postin here are on some intergallactic, space shit.
then again since im living in Korea, i haven't been able ta do any drugs for an eternity...can't wait till i touchdown back home in Cali.
well... after readin that crap
umm nutin much to say nigga
got bored sumwhere in middle of that blabering. But u might have some potential. Jus not at this rate. Nice try at a good ryhme... too bad u totally fucked up! srry nigga but im not feelin dis shit at all. I'm gettin disapointed at jus readin shit like that. Hopefully u improve or jus dont post n e borin bull shiat like dat.
Have been sleeping some lately, but i´ll check this later. lots of shit has been happenining in my life.
ey, shadow i´m down. should hook up on aim or sumthun. Aim name...Psyence131. would speed things up.
nice pieces, shadow. you haven´t been posting the last days so i thought i´d let you know here.
if you´re down, life, it would be cool. ifn anyone of you has a topic that you´re working on i can jump in it. at the moment i´m not writing much that i find interesting.
will let you know if a cretain topic, that fit us two/three?, pops up.
keep doing it fortified. i´ll let you kno what i thought of this laters.
life, sorry for messing up your post here, but you know it´s all peace from my side of town. peaces to both
Yo Fort n Psyence wheneva u2 wana do that callobo, let me know, so I can awaken the sleepers in this motherfucka.
mike - check ur juno one...daanonymous or somethin like that....and my AIM name is vahagn 84, im me sometime. peace
it was some off the head shit.. keystyle if u will.. some times this place gets boring.
This was a could have been off da hook but it seems... akward. the idea of creation is tight i like that but the lyrics don't do it for me. There's definately imagery in the words though.
wheres everyone at?
This peice was aight, I guess. Average at best, I know what your going for, but it just seems you just didn't get there. The concept is coo' overall an ok peice.
at least you know youre not lost beyond the walls. FORTIFIED LIFE, i like readin your shit
nice....pretty gloomy....good images but a little awkward in some places....