Some Thoughts Kept Where My Vocab Is
Can u be destructive at the same time compelling out to constructive/
following the paths that are productive/
mics are entice spitting nice swallowing shit thats seductive/
infatuated by the sounds that are x-rated/
debated like a world topic would mine be faded/
turning to my brain compartments/
slicing my blood vein departments/
dying young and rotting as a carcass/
intriguing seeing the battle beatings/
fleets and crews i always wanted to be indapendent/
original and missable i depended on my defendents/
captured by the themes/
suffering from a relapse/
the last thing i wanted to do is collapse/
barbwires and traps contract backs/
broken down and transformed into lumber/
all seasons when i was dehydrated except the summer/
ultimate culperate directing orders/
embarkments from platoon sargents/
dying of the moon into sunlight without boarders/
flew over the airel view/
insue the attack then drop the metaphors/
floors fall doors stand tall break the nucleus in cores/
cresent shapes bodies shake/
brake up like teutonic plates/
invest on headaches im an ALCOHOLIC/
toxic wastes entering my body everday my stomach was solid/
spit chronic critcal very unfittable/
undefined rhymes blow up like land mines organs turn to cynical/
hospitals hair folicles tracing of fingerprints/
hints of strength in the pen and ink/
I enjoyed this. Don't trip on the negative statements that cats make about ya lines, cause I know I don't. Walaykumus Salaam.
Nice.. i opened this post like ...a Skeptic.. but it was nice...keep writing
Very Hot, As far as I read it, everything flowed nicely...
Keep em coming yo...
Tha Infamous DMC"
I actually felt some of this.. No pun intended.. I felt this.. I entered this thread weary about what i was going to read.. But this wasn't bad at all yo.. Getting slept on will occur.. Be persistant though.. replies will come with time..
:: @ Drastic Measures ::
I think you hopped from topic to topic too quickly.. try and stay on one topic for more than 4 bars/lines.. Do it slowly though.. Try 8 bars then 12.. and so on..!
I THINK SOME OF THIS BOARD'S UNAPPRECIATIVE MONSTERS WILL LIKE IT.