This Might Not Get Any Love But.........
aint been here for the longest, comp problems but...........
On the brightest days-
u'll catch me writing in the darkest shade/
igniting flames with the bic, i engulf the page/
rhyming aint all about the rage/
its the way that u convey-
ya thoughts need to change/
ya caught, it seems strange
livin in the fast lane/
but stop to recognize-
and let this culture rise/
too many of us write like
too many of us highlight
one too many guns clapping
you buggin with that-
read a book to up ya format/
the science aint exact-
but take alliance with the facts/
be prepared before combat-
and come back with
so men can learn from that/
to my real writers peace and daps
still a newbie, respect to all that post
good lookin eskwior, ill keep that in mind peace
i'm also a newbie,
but soem suggestions are to not end the rhyme with such basic words
like "drugs" with "thugs"
it can make a whole lot of difference if you threw the "drugs" inside the sentence instead of at the end, and end with something more complex.
No Hate, just respect for peers
this was feelt..i strongly agree with the down come of the culture....
to many think its all about the hate