Check This Battle For Me And Critique
aiight tell me if you were feeling this battle verse and share and critiques you may have
The Truth: Mission
To get rid of Myst and his whack lyrics permanatley.
Just saying the name Myst, gets me so pissed, that my hand automaticly transforms into an iron fist/
So I can hit you hard with these punch lines, then Ima pulla out my verbal tranqualize, and look at your rhymes through my predetors eyes/
Because nigga im out to kill harder than the Terminator, and the only shit your saying is so fuckin cold I need a radiator/
I can't believe you call that a battle verse, your shit couldnt be top class even if 2Pac helped you rehearse, now look at it from the reverse/
Even if you were good your still gayer than Richard Simmons, your shit is so terrible writing it should be one of the seven deadly sins, after this battle my hands I'm gonna have to rinse/
Because i can't believe I was ever associated with a faggot like you, if you didnt know your flows were bad take a clue, your a faggot and your rhymes don't even stand true, if you didnt know when to stop well here's your fuckin cue/
I can't stand mother fuckers like you coming around thinking they can dominate, you could never take me even if you paid people to vote cuz your lyrics arent that great, I asked you to stop but you just won't fuckin cooperate/
Your making more of a fool of yourself then Allen Iverson did when he tried to flow, I'm giving you so much shit to take at once you can't even swallow, this is just some shit you'll have to chew on for a long time like tobacco/
Only you won't spit it out, it sticks with you until I get a fuckin knockout, do not pout/
Because I am two seconds away from coming even harder, but I don't want to be charged as to having comitted another murder/
I don't want to see your ugly face on this bored ever again, I want you to lose all will to ever even pick up another pen/
Do you enjoy get getting destroyed like these were daily feedings, because honestly I enjoy giving you these beetings/
Now let me just offer you a few words of advise, these lyrics your doing aren't gonna win you first second or third prize, and you sound like you got your balls between your legs and you just got circumsized/
That may not have exactly been advise but it was the shit you needed to hear, the shit I needed to say for you to permanetly disapear/
I hate you and i wish you to have a slow and painfull death, and your afterlife is millions or years of tourture and unrest
imagination is the key....peep HAnsom he got imagination....
but ya got potential
yea gotta agree wit boku on this one..just elevate and keep writing....
"We live to learn, but were taught to die"
to tell u the truth this rhyme was a lil below mediocre...U have to come with harder punches and punchlines...be more creative with your shit..it was too basic and predictable...then your rhyme scheme seemed to be offbeat..I dont know how u rap but it sounded to me like it was off...anyway keep thinkin and tryin...u got maad potential...peace
p.s. if u wanna peep some ill batllers peep out cypher,Anakin,Teknikl,AbolishDaAntonym,Immortal One,and uhhh Really Doe...peace