Hip Hop? First Drop So Please Gimmie Input Please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
on da papers line i spill my mind/
and da way i feel at times/
u ease da pain within my brain when eva i write a ryhme/
had hesitation in makin u my occupation/
daily facin mental frustration from early creation/
but i stay chasin, my dreams/
plots and schems/
me and u a supreme team/
takin this thing to the extreme/
if eva striped, from possesion/
depression would arouse da question/
of how to stop my aggresion, and handle self expression/
told through mic blessions/
and sin confessions/
my mics obesession/
is to end my familys depreation/
and 2 excell in this profession/
flippin and twistin my words wit my tounge/ rollin up one exhailin smoke from my lungs/
yeah i talk to mary jane but shes my only freind/
when me and u aint gettin along she gets us goin again/
floin to win/
writtin shit hotta then 400 degrease wit my pen/
its me and hip hop togather 4 eva till the end/
hey all these guys r saying is make it deeper and if it has to be simple than make it reaL AND FELT. BUT word to the HYbrid, fuck vovabulary, u gotta jus make it fresh and creative..remember this:
truths are always simplest
but yet so beyond us...
keep it like that, refreshing...
keep elevating..this script was definitely not great jus average...for u i recommend getting the Cannibal ox album
u'd like their symbolism an i think u guys flow similar...
F*** what they say about the vocab... try
to be unique, creative, and make sure your
flow is pure... vocab isn't everything.
word to those kids.. too simple yo..
You should try to elevate your vocab and syllable.. usage
yo the verse was just a simplistic iaght verse but at the end when u TRIEd to cross ova to chronic it sucked
keep writin expand yourlines and vocabulary
too me honestly this was wack, wasnt feelin it, it was basic...very choppy and it was boring.....keep writing and elevate