Just a quick keystyle, please critique.
Thinkin bout this girl. Driving me insane!
Held hands walked close, facing the bad weather/
rainy days, snow storms, dark clouds together/
in my mind runs thoughts, it would last forever/
looked foreward to walkin with you on ominous endeavors/
the next nite sat lonely staring at the phone/
thinkin bout how incomplete my life is when im all alone/
i need you in my life like this world needs light/
or i cease to exist like day without night/
many days together seemed just like a minute/
but precious times we commited consequently formed no limits/
i sent your creativity soaring to new heights/
obvious signs of love automatically took flight/
invested love together in the bank of our hearts/
deposits made of kisses withdrawls of hugs before we part/
we hold hands happily through the thick and the thin/
attractn me like gravity, makin my world spin/
as long as we together, this game of life is a sure win/
undoubtly your intellectual being has me wrought/
thrown at your essence, and unintentionally caught/
i love how you appreciate everything ive done/
small gifts to flowers, your smile warms me like the sun/
now im lookin forward to sunny days ahead/
but will trade sunny days for rain with you instead/
whenever the time, whatever the weather, my love grows for you like a flower forever..../
Mad Love Justine. Always.
Hit me up, i want some feedback, still tryin to improve. i know i suck. im takin this seriously. help me out here yall. you guys have the natural talent. sharing is caring. give me some.
i see where your coming from, where on the love and hurt tip, sorry we can't be like hte rest of you cats and "better stop it and post some tight lyrics." bs, some poeple are on the ll cool j tip, love is every and all around us, i think your ish, is very nice, and im glad to see not everyone on this board is like hte mainstream, drug sex and violence, its quit refreshing... oh and i might make a conclusion to my last story, cause i ended up talkign to her, and maribel and i are going to this party this weekend... if things turn out well, ill drop a conclusion to "working up the nerve" well ill catch you on aim, if i see you, peace and can't wait to see what you come wit next...
that was aiight dog. i don't see a reason for this cat to say a thing like that. but he's true u also need what he just said. is that self contracdictory? the reason people slept on u so much is that u also sleep on others.
hey this ain't no ll cool j shit, better stop it and post some tight lyrics.
on this if i was talkin about a female i would use more sensual words than these dictionary words you feel me, put more feelin into instead of makin love hip hop love is love ya feel me
please reply. dont sleep. workin hard to improve. grimp: if you have aol IM hit me up at sn: emvepe.